20 17 composition guidance for college entrance examination: how to write a full-mark narrative

The narration of notes is mainly about notes. The so-called note is a style that expresses the author's thoughts and feelings by completely describing the occurrence, development and ending of a thing. If you want to remember something, you must learn to tell it.

Narrative describes the development and changes of characters experience, words and deeds, and events. Simply put, it is to learn to tell stories and describe the reasons, processes and results of things clearly. There are three common narrative methods: direct narrative, flashback and interpolation.

Narration is in the composition part, so when you learn narration, you learn to write a composition. How to make the narrative detailed and appropriate, clear-cut, and not run a running account is the key of this chapter.

First of all, in chronological order-Xu Shun:

Sequential narration: Narrating in the order of natural development of things. Narratives centered on things should be written in a certain order, making the cause, process and result of things clear. When describing the cause, process and result of things, write the cause and result briefly and describe the process in detail.

[example]

Mud feeling

Last February, my grandfather went to the city to have an appendix operation, and then lived in my house for nearly a month. This kind of "pet" obviously makes grandpa who has been trapped underground for most of his life very unaccustomed. He wants to do something for his family. Cooking? Gas stoves and rice cookers are barely enough, and microwave ovens are scratching their heads. After a few days of "struggle", grandpa changed his direction and threatened to plant some green plants for us to change the lifeless status quo of our family.

My mother found five flowerpots, all of which were filled with earth, all of which were finished green plants bought in the past, and all of them died within one month. Grandpa leaned forward and looked at the dark purple earth. Press with your fingers to measure the hardness, then pick up a handful and put it between your fingers in front of your nose to smell. He frowned, dusted the soil back into the basin and said disdainfully, "What kind of soil is this? It's not what you plant to die or something! " Mother argued: "These are nutrient soils, and the nutrients are well matched. You can survive by watering them. " Grandpa curled his mouth as if he was disgusted.

In the afternoon, grandpa asked me to help him lead the way and go out to dig some soil. I've never seen anything before. I'm curious. I showed him around, but there was no suitable soil. My grandfather is very demanding, and he doesn't want sand on the construction site or cracked loess. Where can I find it? Finally, I jumped into the flowerpot and fiddled with a pot of soil, dragging him away for fear that others would see and scold me. After returning home, grandpa picked a pot full of soil and complained, "I said, why is the grass in this city so awkward? Is this soil also called soil?" As he spoke, he pulled out a wisp of plastic from the soil, and grandpa shook his head again and again. Grandpa's calloused hand stroked the soil and picked out stones, dead branches and clods. After a while, the whole pot was only half full. Grandpa poured some water into it, but he didn't plant anything. He said he would "wake up". He solemnly put half a basin of soil on the balcony and looked at them. Grandpa said softly, "Earth has aura. You can't expect a good harvest without caring about it. If you are good to him, it will give you a return. "

A few days later, I went to school and my grandfather went home. Before I left, I planted something on that pot of soil and told my mother to water it every day and not to be lazy. My mother stayed with my grandfather for a long time, and he refused. She also said, "Life in the city is too hard. I can't smell the earthy smell for ten and a half months, and I am suffocated. "

Grandpa is gone, and my mother waters it every day. There is not much activity in this soil. What did grandpa plant? Is it a rose? Orchids? Or aloe vera?

Call me ten days after grandpa comes home. He said to me, "It's still comfortable at home. Looking at the ground, nothing grows. Mud makes people feel very real. " I smiled. Grandpa can't live without those acres in his life.

I went to see that suspenseful flowerpot every day, and I couldn't guess what grandpa planted. Today, I looked at the onion bud that I was "earning" and suddenly realized that this green bud, in the dark soil, was my grandfather's simple soil feelings.

Comments: This is a propositional composition with the theme of "feelings about the earth". It tells a story related to the earth in a simple and unique language, and depicts a figure with the earth's character-grandpa. In this paper, the chronological narrative method is adopted, starting from my grandfather's visit to my home in February last year, and the process of the old people cultivating green plants for us is described in detail. The descriptions of the so-called "nutrient soil" and "urban soil" in the middle two paragraphs are particularly incisive, humorous and meaningful. They vividly wrote an old man who was obsessed with soil. "Soil is aura. If you don't treat it, you can't expect a good harvest. If you are kind to him, it will repay you." He loved the soil and knew that he couldn't live without it. After ten and a half months, he suffocated.

In this paper, the most commonly used and basic narrative methods are adopted, and the narrative is complete according to the time sequence of plot development. The narrative is natural but suspenseful, with sincere feelings and vivid details, which is a model work in line with the realistic spirit of the new college entrance examination.

2. Insert past or related events into the narrative sequence-insert:

Insertion means that in the process of narration, due to the need to express the purpose of writing, the narrative is temporarily interrupted, and a past event or another related event is inserted to make the narrative more vivid. After the episode, I went back to the main story.

Whether you start with a direct narrative or flashback, you can insert a fragment related to the event in the middle of the narrative. To increase the appeal of the article.

[example]

Grandma's family moved into a new house

"Grandma moved into a new house! Grandma moved into a new house. " Our whole family was very happy when the news came.

One Sunday, my grandparents took our whole family and took a moving car to grandma's new home-Nanfang Xincun. Adults are busy moving furniture upstairs, and we children are skipping behind. Open the iron gate, wow! A big mirror with a door. Opening the door, I saw a "palace-style" living room. The wallpaper is blue, and the invisible patterns give people a harmonious aesthetic feeling. The lower part of the wall is a wooden partition, which is really beautiful. There is a corner leather sofa and an exquisite coffee table in the living room. The 29-inch color TV on the TV cabinet is particularly eye-catching.

Grandma's room connects with the living room. Opening the door of imitation mahogany is really a unique scenery: open the curtains, there are aluminum alloy windows outside, and there is a set of mahogany furniture in the room. Large cabinets, low cabinets and bedside tables are all carved with exquisite patterns. Simmons bed is very soft and comfortable. Lying in bed, I can't help thinking of my grandparents' old house. ...

Grandma's family used to live in Shinan District, a densely populated shanty town. In grandpa's words, they live in the house of "seventy-two tenants". Whenever summer comes, flies, mosquitoes, fleas, grandparents are bitten and blistered all over. They hold a fly swatter in one hand and a "radar" in the other to kill mosquitoes and flies. As soon as I entered my grandmother's house, I smelled a pungent smell of pesticides and cool oil. The stairs in the house can be described as "crumbling". The floor and handrails have been eaten away by moths. Once, my grandmother stepped on a piece of rotten wood and fell down, lying in bed for three months. ...

I was thinking about it when grandma's cry interrupted my thoughts: "Cheng Yan, come and eat watermelon." I promised and left the room.

On the way home, mom and dad said excitedly: grandparents should really enjoy their retirement. On the way, we left a string of happy laughter.

[Writing Analysis]: The author described a happy event that made him feel happy. When describing grandma's joy in moving to a new home, the description of grandma's hometown is inserted, which makes the new home and hometown in sharp contrast and makes the content richer and more touching.

carve

The classroom was quiet, and the wind and rain outside the window made the teacher's speech sound a little sad. The door rang twice and thought it was raining. It was a long time before I thought it was a person. The teacher opened the door.

As the door opened, a thin unkempt head came in. I paused and stood up: "Dad!" When my father saw me, he grinned and bowed deeply to the teacher: "Sorry! Excuse me! "

The rainy day in March makes people tremble with cold. Seeing my father's wet clothes, I felt pity and resentment: "What are you doing here on a rainy day!" " "

"Don't delay your work in rainy days, take a ride, don't pay ... hehe." Father smiled shyly. He is still worried about his vegetable garden.

I'm a little tired of his haggling over every ounce. Once, I went into a restaurant with him, and he only bought two very cheap dishes anyway. After eating, he ate a plate of fish left at the same table with relish in full view. I just feel ashamed.

When I came to the dormitory, my father took out an old-fashioned cotton-padded coat. Oh, my God! I have two sweaters, a sweater and a leather jacket, which is enough. "The night before, I dreamed that your hand was burned. Your mother said she was afraid that you would catch a cold. Hey hey. "

I am speechless. My retired parents help me calculate at home every day. A tree died in front of the door, a crow crowed, and everyone came to see me once. Once I said, "What if I don't pass the exam?" My father's eyes suddenly dimmed: "There is nothing I can do. I am afraid that you will be bullied in the future. " I know the meaning of this sentence when I look at his back that has become bent after decades of poverty and criticism.

His hand is still in the homemade canvas bag. After a while, he took out a plastic bag of oranges: "Hey, there are 23 * * *, please count them.

I immediately understood that he had been bargaining with others for a long time before buying it at the fruit stand. I didn't count it twice, so I'm too lazy to count it again.

As the exam approaches, my father knows that I am very depressed. Father curled up in the rainy night and walked into the wind and rain step by step. A gust of wind blew, and his thin, bent figure trembled, just like a statue carved from the roots of a dead tree, solidified on the stormy path in front of my eyes.

My heart suddenly couldn't help shivering. Oh, this is my father, a statue that has been eroded by wind and rain for 67 years!

Comments:

This article vividly depicts the image of a father who takes good care of his son, which naturally reminds us of our own father and thousands of fathers like Qian Qian around us.

In the process of depicting the father's image, the author used two interpolation. First, it appears in the fifth paragraph, describing a time when the father and son went to a restaurant for dinner. The father bought two extremely cheap dishes anyway and ate the fish left at the same table, which supplemented his father's haggle over every ounce. This episode highlights the father's frugality, describes the hardships of his father's life and the difficulties of training his son to go to school. Another parenthesis in the seventh paragraph is that my father gave me a cotton-padded jacket, which reminded me of my father's concern for me all the time. A tree died, a crow crowed, and they all came to see me once, which fully showed how much my father cared for me. Through a conversation with his father about his studies, this paper reveals the reasons why his father expects his son to succeed in his studies.

These two episodes enriched the content of the article, increased the content of the article, and well supplemented the greatness of fatherly love.

There are three points to note when using interpolation:

First, the narrative arrangement should be based on the needs of the theme, and must not blindly pursue the novelty of the form and abuse it.

Second, pay attention to the details of the whole article. No matter what is inserted, it is always in a secondary position and can only be used as a foil and supplement to the main plot.

Third, after the narrative, we must return to the original narrative and pay attention to the connection and transformation between the two.

[Narrative Training]:

Third, the "flashback method" began:

The article that begins with flashback method does not introduce the basic information such as time, place and people. Instead, simply say the status quo first, and then turn from the status quo to the description of the past scene in one sentence. Write the ending first, then fill in the reason and process.

Characteristic flashback is not a reverse narrative of the whole event, but a sequential narrative method besides advancing a certain part. There are generally three kinds of flashbacks: first, in order to express the central idea of the article, the part that can best express the central idea is mentioned in front and highlighted; The second is to make the structure of the article changeable and avoid straightforward narration; Third, in order to show the effect, the article twists and turns, causing suspense and fascinating. Explain the starting point clearly when flashback. There should be clear boundaries between flashback and sequence, necessary text transition and natural connection. Pay special attention not to toss and turn aimlessly, making the article unclear.

Please use flashback writing skills.

Remember an unforgettable thing

Last week, I was depressed for a whole week, and that failure made me very sad.

It happened last Tuesday. At the morning meeting that day, the class teacher put forward the monitor candidate that I was most concerned about recently. When the teacher asks, "Who wants to run?" I raised my hand without hesitation. Then there is an exciting vote. For the other two students who ran with me, I think my victory is no problem. But I overestimated myself. I lost and she won. I was silent for ten minutes. Sitting there in a daze, thinking quietly, enduring hard ... Then the blackboard newspaper and broadcast of the monitor candidate stung my heart again and again. ...

The above clip is a flashback. Write the ending first, and then start with the event in the original development order.

How to conceive a composition by flashback?

1, you can describe the most wonderful part of the article at the beginning of the article.

For example, this morning, on Shuidong Street, a junior high school student was rushing to school, followed by an old man. In the blink of an eye, junior high school students quickly flashed into the school and went straight to the class, and the old man rushed in. Why did the old man follow that junior high school student? Things have to start from last Sunday afternoon.

The narrative of reading examples is wonderful because it sets suspense, captures the reader's heart at once and arouses the reader's reading desire. The little author put this wonderful part at the beginning of the composition, which naturally led to memories of the past.

2, you can write the results of the event first, and then describe the process of the event in chronological order or place.

For example, I have a brooch in my drawer. This is not an ordinary brooch. This brooch shows grandma's meticulous care for me. Whenever I see it, grandma's loving face emerges in front of my eyes, and whenever I hold it, I can't help but recall that unforgettable past.

Read "In my drawer, I treasure a brooch." This is the result of the event, and the little author put this result at the beginning of the article, which naturally leads to a memory of the past about the origin of this brooch.

3. You can mention the part of the whole event that best expresses the theme of the article to the beginning narrative.

In the dim light, mother is still screwing the screws. Again, again, every tightening takes all your strength. Under the tricycle frame, the mother's temples have been covered with silver wire, and the wrinkles around her eyes are like deep and shallow ravines. Her rough face is paler in the light, and her hands like dead tree skins are constantly pushing around. . . . . . Looking at my mother's hard hands, scenes of the past gurgled out of my mind.

The original intention of reading "Little Author" is to show the greatness of maternal love through the contribution of the mother who rides a tricycle as a profession to her family every morning and night. The clip of mother repairing tricycle in the example is undoubtedly the most expressive part of the article. The author mentioned this part at the beginning of the article to describe and describe, which naturally produced memories of the past.

4. Explain the starting point when flashback. There must be a necessary transition between flashback and sequence. Do it naturally.

For example, in the above example, at the transition between flashback and sequence, the starting points of events such as "things have to start from last Sunday afternoon", "I can't help but recall that unforgettable past" and "scenes of the past gurgled out of my mind" are clearly explained.

cheat

I hurt my leg riding a bike and lay in a hospital bed. The monitor smiled at me with a fruit in his hand. Looking at her enthusiasm like a big sister, I felt sad for a while What happened the day before yesterday caught my eye like a movie.

What happened in the classroom the afternoon before yesterday.

"Hey, good news! Watch Star Wars in the afternoon. " The "radio director" in the class started broadcasting before entering the classroom door.

Star Wars? It is starring Ge You and Cai Ming. Can it be comedy? Great! I'm so happy.

After two classes, the monitor gave out movie tickets. It's my turn I read "God bless" in my mouth and took a picture. You see, alas, the one in the back row is really bad.

My relationship with the monitor has been very good, I gather together to her ear:

"Are we friends enough?" I stared at her and asked softly.

"What's the matter?"

"This ticket won't do. Can you change it for me? " I seem to be begging her.

"What?" She turned to look at me, "no, everyone will have opinions. If I draw well in the future, I will exchange with you. If not, I can only admit that I am unlucky. " What a business-like look.

There is no hope of changing tickets. I said to myself, "Wait till I don't punish you." I snorted heavily.

After watching the movie, I ran into the classroom first, and the monitor walked last. My seat is right in front of her. She must pass me when she reaches the top. As a result, a plan to rectify the monitor soon formed in my mind.

I pretended to study the topic with my deskmate, but one foot slipped into the aisle. The aisle is very narrow, and only one person can pass through. The monitor came in a hurry "pa!" She tripped and fell forward, and her whole body fell heavily on the concrete floor. I think it must be very painful. She blushed and struggled to get up from the ground. Her eyes were full of tears, and she looked at me in surprise. I was at a loss and bowed my head in shame.

I was immersed in the memories of guilt, and suddenly I heard the sweet voice of the monitor: "Yun, does your leg hurt badly?" I sat up nervously, threw myself into her arms and cried with a loud "wow".

Running mother

1 black horse! See the dark horse again!

When she crossed the finish line first, the whole stadium was boiling. Incredibly, in the international marathon, the champion turned out to be an amateur who trained for nearly a year!

Chemodier, a 27-year-old Kenyan peasant woman, became famous.

Chemojir's whole family lives in the mountainous area, and her husband is an honest plowman with nothing but farming. A year ago, Chemedil was at a loss and secretly sad that he could not provide tuition for his four children. The husband took a stuffy cigarette to comfort her: "Who taught children to be born in poor families? Accept it! "

If children don't go to school, they can only continue the fate of the poor! Can we only accept fate? She didn't want to.

6. Long-distance running is popular in the local area, and famous athletes come forth in large numbers. If the ranking is good, there will be a lot of bonuses. When she was a girl, she was attracted by the coach, but failed for various reasons. At this moment, her mind flashed: it is better to practice marathon!

⑦ Marathon is an extreme sport, and strong will and excellent physical quality are indispensable. She is 27 years old, without adequate nutrition and professional basic training. How can she win? After she calmed down, she became timid, but there was no other way. If you don't even have the courage to dream, forced change is possible.

Her husband finally agreed to her bold "creativity". The next morning, before dawn, she ran up the rugged mountain road. After running only a few hundred meters, her legs were like lead. Stop to catch your breath and run. It is better to run with will than with legs. After running for a few days, there are countless blood bubbles on my feet. She also wanted to back down, but when she got home and saw the children clamoring for reading, she was ashamed of her cowardice. Can't back down! She clearly knows that this is hope!

Pet-name ruby training intensity gradually increased, but her nutrition is far behind. One day, in the morning, she still didn't come home. Her husband was worried about her accident, so he went out to look for it. Finally, he found his wife who fainted on the mountain road. She took her wife home and all the children gathered around. The eldest son cried and said, "Mom, stop running, I won't go to school!" " "She held her son's hand, tears gushed out like broken beads and said nothing. The next morning, she was running alone on the silent mountain road.

Attending after nearly a year of hard training, Chemodhir took part in the domestic marathon for the first time, won the seventh place, and began to emerge. A coach was deeply moved by her persistence, and resources showed that her grades had improved rapidly.

(1 1) Finally, Chemdir ushered in the Nairobi International Marathon. In order to raise money for the trip, the husband sold all the animals in the family, which is all the property in the family! After the starting gun rang, Chemodyr took the lead in the front of the team, which was an extremely dangerous move. He might be exhausted after a game and even unable to finish the game. But for the sake of the children and the family, she threw caution to the wind!

(12) Maybe God was moved by Chemodyr's sincerity. She running all the way, with the help of God, was the first to cross the finish line after 2 hours, 39 minutes and 09 seconds. At that moment, she forgot to pay tribute to the audience, lying on the track in tears and kissing the earth madly.

(13) The sudden appearance of the dark horse overwhelmed the narrator, and it took him a long time to find all her information.

At the award ceremony (14), a sports reporter asked her: "You are an amateur, and your age is at an absolute disadvantage. We all want to know what made you beat many professional masters to win the championship? "

(15) "Because I am very eager to win the first prize of 7000 pounds!" When this statement comes out, it often causes an uproar. What she said was inappropriate and contrary to the spirit of sports. Chem-Gilmer went on to say, "With this bonus, my four children will have money to go to school ..." The noisy playground suddenly became quiet, and people realized that children were her running motivation. In an instant, thunderous applause rang out from the venue. At that time, people expressed their heartfelt congratulations to the champion and sincere wishes to their mother.

(16) Chemodhir has become an idol of Kenya. Some people say that he is a genius of long-distance running, some people say that he is a champion made by poverty, and some people say that no reason is needed. This is a miracle. Yes, another sports miracle: but not a professional athlete, but a mother.

{Intensive training}

Write a diary article and record the things in your memory. Use flashback narrative order.

2. Title: My annoyance requirements: In the chronological narrative, I mainly describe the content of an interpolation and explain the reasons for my annoyance.