Qin Wenjun's novel "A Promise Is Promise"

Interpretation and full score analysis of composition questions in Shaanxi senior high school entrance examination in 2004

Copy of test questions

After reading the modern article "The Promise of Gold", what kind of association and thinking do you have? Please contact the reality of family, school or social life, choose your best style, and write on the topic of "commitment".

Requirements: ① Self-made questions. ② Use proper expressions. (3) the article is not less than 600 words. If written as a poem, it should be no less than 20 lines. (4) There should be no real names such as names of people, schools and places. Interpretation of test questions

In 2004, the composition topic of the senior high school entrance examination in Shaanxi Province was "Commitment", which was the same as the composition "Honesty" in 200 1 National College Entrance Examination. This is the concrete embodiment of the national implementation of the Outline of Civic Morality Construction in recent years, the concrete embodiment of the "courtesy and honesty" education of the whole people, and it is also the first time that Shaanxi Province requires every candidate to sign the "commitment letter of honesty examination" before the middle school entrance examination this year.

First, the characteristics of the test questions

1. Hold high the banner of the mainstream style of the topic composition of the senior high school entrance examination, and have a high degree of openness (such as choosing your own style and making your own topic, etc.). ) in harmony with the necessary restrictions, it takes care of the interests of candidates with different hobbies to the maximum extent and provides them with an excellent space to play their writing level.

2. The topic of "Commitment" gave birth to the reading article "One Commitment and a Thousand Daughters" (Author: Qin Wenjun), which is closely related to "One Commitment and a Thousand Daughters". In 2002, this form of composition proposition appeared in the senior high school entrance examination in Zibo, Shanghai and other provinces and cities, which truly embodied the Chinese teaching concept of "reading and writing at home" and had a distinct orientation.

3. On the basis of 2002 and 2003, Shaanxi Province continued to strengthen the innovative consciousness that "poetry as a literary genre can become the composition style of the examination room", and once again consistently required the composition of the college entrance examination to be no less than 20 lines, so that the college entrance examination and the college entrance examination were successfully "connected", which reflected the characteristics of "consistent system" in the Chinese teaching process of the senior high school entrance examination.

Second, writing guidance

1. Read articles and questions. "Wen" refers to the reading article "a promise is worth a thousand dollars" involved in the exam "2 (2)", and "topic" refers to the composition exam. How to understand "Wen, Ti"? For reading this passage, we should at least meet the basic reading requirements of the overall perception of the content, theme and writing method of the article; For this kind of "composition test", the sign of "understanding" is that under the premise of clarifying the "topic", the specific ideas and methods of "cracking" and "explaining" the topic in the "composition test" can be used to clarify the relevant precautions and requirements. Of course, "text" and "topic" are a whole, and they must not be treated separately.

2. Determine the theme. The word "commitment" itself is not difficult to understand. It is a manifestation of "sincerity", but its connotation is far less than "sincerity". Comparing the two together is mainly because the excellent composition on the topic of "honesty" in the 200 1 National College Entrance Examination left a deep impression on us, which is likely to "mislead" the writing of this topic. Therefore, candidates must be very sober to prevent the deviation of equating "commitment" with "integrity" in the examination, which will lead to serious consequences.

3. Personality expression. Once the topic is approved, the next thing is to "express". "Expression" involves many aspects of writing accumulation, such as conception, conception, material selection and language, which can best reflect the comprehensive writing level of candidates. At this point, I advocate "personality expression", that is, candidates can control their existing writing accumulation as freely, boldly and skillfully as possible around the topic of "commitment" and build a novel, beautiful and solid composition building with their own personality characteristics without violating relevant requirements. I believe that every candidate will have a good way to express his personality.

Full score composition 1

2004 Shaanxi Senior High School Entrance Examination Edition "Kong Ming Tears Masu"

[Background] Before the war, Ma Su made a written pledge to fulfill a military order, saying that he could not keep the street kiosks and was willing to obey the military law. Today, the pavilion fell fruit, and Zhuge Liang cried to cut it down.

[The curtain rises] Zhuge Liang is sitting in the tent, and all the soldiers are standing on both sides of the tent door. (Winter, winter, winter, there are three drums)

Officer in charge of beheading: (1) Prime Minister, it's time. The identity of the prisoner Masu has been confirmed. Please order him to be beheaded!

Zhuge Liang: (tears streaming down her face, helpless but determined) chop! (Discard token)

Soldier: (kneeling and shouting at the same time) Stay by the sword-stay by the sword-stay by the sword-

Zhuge Liang: (surprised) There is no joke in the army. What's the use of keeping this man who doesn't keep his word

Soldier A: Prime Minister, although General Ma Su lost his street pavilion, he was heroic and made great contributions in all previous battles. The loss of the street pavilion was only a temporary negligence, and he should never be punished without paying attention to the reward! Why don't you let him plead guilty and make meritorious deeds, so as to save an Iliad and give General Ma a chance to correct his mistakes.

Soldier B: It's really sad that the street pavilion fell down, but at best, General Masu is the first person responsible, not the person directly responsible. I'm afraid there has never been a case in history where the person directly responsible is not severely punished but asked the first responsible person! Prime Minister, although General Masu failed to fulfill his original promise, it is really not his own problem. Besides, even if General Masu "has hard work but no credit, fatigue and no hard work", please leave General Masu alone! As the saying goes, "saving a life is better than building a seven-level pagoda." I hope the Prime Minister will think twice!

Soldier C: Prime Minister, you'd better not kill General Ma. You know, General Ma has eight distant relatives who hold important positions in the palace. What are the benefits of killing General Ma?

Soldier: Prime Minister, they are absolutely right! "Enemies should be reconciled, not reconciled", please take back your token! Maybe, General Ma is deeply indebted to you, and will soon promote Zhuge Liangxiao, the son of his son, to be his deputy!

Zhuge Liang: (Standing up, pacing, talking to himself) People often say, "Two heads are better than one." It seems that this statement is true. Why didn't I expect the consequences of chopping and killing Ma Su ... It's just that he didn't keep his promise anyway!

(Sit down again and pretend to wipe your tears) Gentlemen, please get up. Today, according to your suggestion-herald, take back the token and declare Masu account!

Herald: (shouting) Ma Jinzhang

Ma Su: (going up, kneeling down) Please meet the Prime Minister!

Zhuge Liang: Ma Su, for the sake of all the soldiers pleading for you, I will let you live for the time being today, but the death penalty can be pardoned, and the living crime can't escape. You are limited to pay a fine of 52 million gold within three days to enrich the military supplies, and there must be no mistakes!

Masu: Thank you, Prime Minister. I will definitely pay the fine on time, and I will never go back on my word!

Soldier: (Shouting in unison) The Prime Minister is wise! The prime minister is wise! The Prime Minister is wise ... (Laughter)

[Voice-over] It is said that the unhealthy trend of dishonesty has spread.

[Curtain falls]

Reasons for Full Score This is an innovative composition, with full score. Its originality is mainly manifested in the following two points: First, the article boldly denies the story of "Kongming beheaded Ma Su with tears" in The Romance of the Three Kingdoms, making Zhuge Liang, who has strict military discipline and a mountain of law enforcement, hypocritical and treacherous in this article. This is bound to have a great impact on readers' imprisoned thinking mode, which is easy to attract readers' attention, and the writing purpose of satirizing and conniving at untrustworthy leaders is perfectly reflected in this kind of thinking. Secondly, the article can successfully use the unique style of "drama" to express its meaning in a unique way, which is rare in the composition of senior high school entrance examination in Shaanxi Province in recent years.

Full score composition 2

A promise to be kept.

Commitment is something more valuable than gold, and no one who is smart does not cherish it or keep it.

For an unintentional promise, Bill Gates, the richest man in the world, can ignore many of his own interests-

A young reporter who just started his career chose Bill Gates as the interview object in order to write a wonderful report that impressed his boss and colleagues. He waited for half a month in Bill Gates' secretary, and finally got Bill Gates' promise to arrange an interview after a major speech related to Bill Gates' career future. At 5 pm, it was time for Bill Gates to meet the young reporter, but the enthusiastic questions and far-sighted suggestions from the audience made Bill Gates forget everything and immerse himself in the speech. At 5: 40, the little reporter finally couldn't bear it. He asked his secretary to give Bill Gates a note that said, "What is more important than a promise?" After seeing it, Bill Gates was so ashamed that he didn't even have time to explain it to all the participants, so he hastily accepted an interview with a small reporter and extended the original interview time by 30 minutes.

There is also a story about keeping his promise: at the end of World War II, a US military commander collected white sheets from local villagers in the snow as a cover and promised to return them soon after use. But unfortunately, after the battle, the sheets were either lost or torn, and there was no way to return them to the villagers. At this time, the commander was ordered to disarm and return to the field.

The commander who returned to his hometown never forgot his promise to the villagers. A few years later, he sold all the properties he bought, and then took the money to sell the properties and took one white bill after another all the way to the village where he fought and returned them to the villagers one by one. He finally fulfilled his promise and won the respect and love of the local villagers.

There are not many people who can really keep their promises now. Many people don't know the value and importance of promises at all. They only know how to write empty checks to others all day, but they don't know how to honor their promises with their own practical actions. There are even some stupid people who regard this behavior of deceiving others' feelings as their "ability". I said, these people are too much!

At the beginning of this argumentative paper, I put forward the argument that "commitment is more precious than gold, and there is no wise man who doesn't cherish and keep it", and fully demonstrated two typical factual arguments: "Bill Gates was interviewed by a small reporter" and "a commander returned the villagers' sheets". At the end of the article, people who don't know and keep their promises are severely criticized in connection with real life. The full-text reasoning is clear, the structure is rigorous, and the language is concise, which is a very good exam composition.

Full score composition 3

Recruitment "commitment"

A well-known big company openly recruits a senior manager with high salary. Many applicants were screened at different levels, and finally ten people entered the re-examination list. Honest Bill was lucky to be one of the ten interviewers. On this day, he came to the company with nine other second-round examiners, who will be interviewed face-to-face by the company boss in turn.

It was Bill who finally walked into the boss's office.

As soon as he walked in, he saw the boss of the company stand up from his seat in great surprise, and then ran quickly, holding Bill in one hand and patting him on the shoulder in the other, and excitedly said to him, "Bill, is your name Bill?" I finally met you today! My daughter had a car accident that time. But for your help, I would have driven her to the hospital. Maybe she's already dead! And you, such a good person, why did you leave quietly when I remembered to thank you? Please tell me, I will promise you anything, I have plenty of money! "

Bill was puzzled by what the company boss said. To tell the truth, without this recruitment, he has never even met the boss of the company, let alone helped his beloved daughter. Bill thinks the boss of the company must have mistaken me for someone else. Although Bill desperately wanted the position he wanted to apply for, when he thought of his consistent honesty principle and his "honesty" promise to the company in writing when recruiting, he repeatedly explained to the company boss that there was no such thing, and finally let the company boss stop saying anything.

Just as he was waiting for the company boss's second interview, he heard the company boss laughing and saying loudly, "Young man, I don't have a daughter. I just want to test how many of you can keep your promises ... I already lost confidence in today's second interview. Your appearance, to be exact, is the personality charm that you exude to keep your promise, which makes me turn from worry to joy. Congratulations on becoming the senior manager of our company! " Bill woke up like a dream.

How important it is for a person to keep his promise!

Full score reason "writing stories" is a writing skill that is easy to get high scores, which is adopted in this paper. The composition vividly tells readers how important it is for a person to keep his promise through the story of "Bill" keeping his promise, applying in good faith and finally being hired. And the composition consciously put this sentence revealing the theme after the story, making it the "leopard tail" of the full text, adding a lot of color to the article.

Full score composition 4

The promise of door lock

I come from a place with a long history.

I carved it according to the details,

I'm in the market,

I'll make sure one side is safe

Where there is home, there is me,

I just locked the door.

Although I am young,

But there is definitely no small commitment:

Love one's job, be loyal to one's duty,

This is my unchangeable principle;

Conscientious and unswerving;

This is my eternal pursuit.

Has anyone seen my little lock?

Seek a happy life

Is there no progress in the work?

In order to keep my unchanging promise,

I abstract my heart into pieces.

Red rose key,

Dedicated to my dear master for safekeeping,

My love for him went through time and space,

It's also staged.

For junior high school students, it is generally difficult to get full marks in the poetry composition of the senior high school entrance examination. However, the marking teacher gave it full marks. The whole poem is full of poetry and painting, with the image of "door lock" and vivid personification of "infinite" cleverly to the point, revealing the pursuit of "small door lock" to keep its promise. It seems that writing "lock" is actually writing people, which has the remarkable characteristics of excellent poetry. The language of the whole poem is concise, the rhythm is bright, the meaning is rich, and it is very beautiful.

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