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On the application of harmony and competition

A grand celebration

Peace and competition

China has always attached importance to peace. As the saying goes, "everything goes well at home." By extension, as for bringing peace and stability to the country, it also follows the principle of "harmony without scarcity, harmony without inclination". "Harmony" seems to have become a deep-rooted concept and dissolved into our blood. If there is peace, nothing will happen. However, thousands of years of feudal history have shaken this belief from the side, and people began to doubt and think, and began to look for new directions. Nowadays, "competition", as a topic language, is widely popular in every corner. This is an era of competition. Without competition, there will be no development. Competition creates self-renewal and social renewal. However, it is incredible that "harmony is precious", which has long been forgotten by everyone, has been re-emerged as a new term. What is right and wrong between "harmony" and "competition"?

The two seem to be opposites. "Harmony" means friendly coexistence, and "contention" must be a scene of bullets (the word "frame" was misspelled, and the word "towel" was written as "ear knife"). If you win the game, you are sure to beat your opponent and take the lead. What about "getting along" But the fact is not so simple and absolute. Based on society, harmony and competition coexist. Just like nature, there is mutual assistance within the same species, and there is also competition for survival between different species. Nature tells us in its true colors that the coexistence of the two has not disturbed the normal development, but has made it more harmonious for hundreds of millions of years. If you treat everything around you as an enemy and don't know how to live in harmony, you will only isolate yourself and become an outcast of society. However, tolerance everywhere and careful avoidance of "causing trouble" will inevitably lead to backwardness and abandonment by the times. Therefore, neither of them can go to extremes, and a balance must be found between them to keep the balance of survival in a good and stable state.

With the development of the world, the projects we want to study are more and more complicated, and the requirements for science and technology are higher, and too much wealth will be uncontrollable. This is also the reason why the concepts of "harmony" and "harmony" have been questioned again. But the difference is that it not only does not interfere with each other and coexist peacefully, but also adds a new connotation of "cooperation". The purpose of pooling scattered forces to form a small group is actually to improve competitiveness.

Everything is dialectical unity. In a peaceful environment, competition, an active factor, can explode its power. (This article is an exercise for senior three students in a key high school in Xi 'an. The typos and sick sentences in the article are kept as they are. )

Is this article a proposition? Or did you write your own topic? Did you give the materials? If it is a proposition, I don't know what specific requirements the questioner has. Gu said with a proposition.

First of all, ideas

This topic is actually very big, and it is impossible to explain it "comprehensively and profoundly" with an 800-word "exam composition".

Topics such as "_ _ _ _ _ _" and _ _ _ _ "have the meaning of focusing on their relationship. The title only gives a discussion scope, but does not clearly point out what kind of relationship the two are. This requires the author to clearly put it forward in the article (the so-called "clear argument"). Generally speaking, all short articles are pointed out directly in the first paragraph (its linguistic sign is: a complete affirmative sentence or a compound sentence with positive and negative contrast)-the so-called "conciseness" is also true. However, in the first paragraph of this article, there are 260 words in line 13 (spaces and punctuation should be calculated), but the relationship between them cannot be clearly pointed out! There is a suspicion of unclear views (although I put forward my own views later-"the coexistence of the two makes it-this' it' is unclear-become more harmonious" "neither can go to extremes, and a balance must be found between the two"-but the sentences are scattered and unclear).

It should be noted that high school students should be trained in "writing in the examination room"-your article has only one reader (in recent years, some provinces have started to use computers to mark your article on the marking point LAN, and only two or three teachers can see your article), and that is the marking teacher. And he (they) will finish reading this article in two or three minutes (the length will not exceed five minutes) or even less (this is completely different from our teacher's correcting the composition). Therefore, if you want to leave a good impression on him, you must write the beginning of the article well, that is to say, you'd better come straight to the point and make the argument clear in less than 200 words.

The conception of this topic is very difficult for senior high school students. The connotation of "harmony" is very broad and not simple. Look up the dictionary, the word "harmony" is composed of many words, such as "peace", "peace", "harmony" and "reconciliation" ... When reading "live" (with three pronunciations of two tones, four tones and light tones), there are "dough" and "harmony". In this issue, "harmony" and "competition" are mentioned together, which is actually equivalent to limiting the connotation of "harmony"-contrary to the meaning of "competition", which requires students to know the meaning of "competition". The author of this paper said that "competition must be a scene of bullets", but in fact the concepts of "competition" and "war" have been confused. It can be seen that if you want to write this article well and have a clear thinking, you must understand these two concepts comprehensively, profoundly and accurately.

Whether "harmony" and "competition" in this topic should be understood as follows:

"Harmony" refers to the peaceful coexistence and friendly coexistence among individuals, collectives, groups, parties, nations and even countries; And "competition" naturally refers to the competition and struggle from small individuals to large groups, groups, parties, nations and even countries in all fields of social life-politics, economy, science and technology, education, military affairs, sports to culture and art, ecological environment, social welfare, people's lives, etc., in order to seek their own greatest interests, common development and continuous progress.

Teacher Yu thinks that it is good for the author of this article to quote some common sayings at the beginning of the article, such as "harmony is precious", "home and everything flourish" and "harmony without difference", but unfortunately, he can't clearly identify the meanings of these two concepts in the topic and lead to arguments neatly, which makes the article have the defects of unclear views and procrastination, which may leave a bad impression on the marking teacher.

Second, the content

It is recommended to read through the book Tolerance by Lao Fanglong-nicknamed Hendrik Willem Van Loon in the United States-and only the preface of this book is selected in the high school textbook.

The most commonly used and powerful reasoning method in argumentative writing is to list facts and make positive and negative comparisons. However, the content of this article lacks convincing factual arguments, and there are many simple arguments, which is very weak.

Middle school students have this problem, generally because they study less. I don't know much about history, people and social life. At home and abroad, it is naturally difficult to give vivid and powerful examples. After reading the book Tolerance, you will know: How deep does Lao Fanglong know about world history! It is those real and vivid historical facts that support Lao Longfang's assertion that intolerance of old times, old ideas and old habits hinders the development and progress of society, and social development and progress need tolerance. Without these real and vivid historical facts, the whole book is just a "bookshelf"-a few abstract theories, who would like to read!

In the autumn of the first year of Jiading (1208), Lu You was eighty-four years old. He wrote a poem "Stone Pass" to encourage his son Lu Tong: "I am a beginner in poetry, but I want to paint; In middle age, you begin to realize that there is less, and then you catch a glimpse of grandeur. ..... Poetry is one of the six arts, and you can't be crafty. If you want to learn poetry, kung fu is outside the poem. "

If the author is familiar with Chinese and foreign history and pays attention to the social life of all countries in the world, mainly China, in recent decades, it is easy to find out about "the Cultural Revolution in China, World War I and World War II, the conflict between Palestine and Israel in the Middle East, ethnic relations, the war on terrorism, etc. ) and "competition brings vitality, prosperity and development, egalitarianism,' pot rice' is a pool of stagnant water" (high-tech, new products, talents, market, recruitment, laid-off, etc. ) and "competing and developing in an atmosphere of harmony" (the five rings of the Olympic Games are connected, and the runner-up and runner-up are "losers"-shaking hands and hugging the champion on the podium. Some of them are handy, explain them in detail. Isn't matter "rich"? When the materials are enriched, the content will naturally be "enriched".

"Kung Fu is above poetry"-Lu You's poems are really wise words!

(For reference, please refer to the following online article: "Asking the canal is so clear that there is flowing water from the source-talking about drawing materials for writing" website:/teach/teach/lunwen/Yuwen/20011602040/kloc-0.

The full text is as follows: The canal is so clear because of the source of living water-the composition is based on materials.

165438+1October16 is from Aobo Education Network, the author is unknown.

Looking at some middle school students' compositions today, I really dare not compliment them or even want to read them. The narrative writing teacher is nothing more than the light in front of the midnight window, the pale face set off by the textbook, and the persuasive talk after school ... Writing about classmates is nothing more than a small precious gift, an inexplicable misunderstanding, and a lifelong regret brought about by moving and transferring ... The arguments of argumentative essays are nothing more than Chen Jingrun, Zhang Haidi and Kong Fansen ... How narrow the knowledge is and how empty the content is. In fact, those students who write compositions are very painful-where to find writing materials?

First, if you want to learn poetry, your kung fu is outside poetry.

"If you want to learn poetry, kung fu is above poetry" is a famous sentence that Lu You, a famous poet in the Southern Song Dynasty, taught his son. This means that if you really want to learn to write poetry, you must work hard outside poetry, that is, you need to practice in life. Learning poetry is like this, isn't writing like this? There are inexhaustible sources of writing everywhere in life. If it is limited to meditation in composition class, it can only be "where to find writing materials"

Daily diet, neighborhood affection, welcoming, flowers, birds, insects and fish can all become writing materials.

Gui Youguang's famous "Ridge Records" borrows the history of the rise and fall of a "hundred-year-old house" to recall his family trivia, express his feelings about people and the vicissitudes of the world, and miss his grandmother, mother and wife. This should be enlightening for today's composition writing. Nutrients are whether people who teach and learn composition can be liberated from "writing big themes" and "expressing serious themes". To write about a teacher, you can write about his daily life, his relationship with his superiors, his education for children, his personal joys and sorrows, and the lessons of his past failures. When writing about classmates, you can write about fighting after class, being naughty in a class, being extremely relaxed after finishing homework, whispering among friends, and writing practical jokes after class. Why do you have to write about how to study hard and how to "turn over a new leaf" when writing about yourself? Trivia of life can be included in the text. In addition, neighborhood disputes, noisy streets, corners of streets, shopping malls, urban customs, rural wildness, early morning in the courtyard, sunset ... can all be writing materials. It is really "looking for him in the crowd for thousands of Baidu, suddenly looking back, that person is there, and the lights are dim."

Second, this book has its own.

A large part of life is reading. John Lubbock, an American, said in The Joy of Reading: "Books give us more vivid ideas than real life, just as the flowers reflected in the reflection are often more colorful and charming than the real flowers." Drawing writing materials from books is a road that has been proved to be correct by facts.

Third, Chinese textbooks-everyone's writing textbooks.

The baton of the exam and the heavy homework may not make students dabble in the so-called "light books", so they can also put their views on Chinese books in their hands and read "serious books" as a matter of course.

The new edition of this set of Chinese textbooks by People's Education Society points out in the "explanation" in front of the book: "Most texts are followed by an interesting little knowledge (or small information, small remarks, small anecdotes, etc. ) related to the text, so as to broaden students' horizons and increase their interest in learning Chinese. Students just read, don't check and don't take exams. "

Indeed, behind most of the texts in this set of textbooks, there is a paragraph called "lace literature" by students (in a small flower box). For example, there is a famous Tang Tao's words about life after Wisteria Falls; After meiling three chapters, ostrovsky's famous sentence "How Steel was Tempered" was added: "Man is the most precious life. Life is for everyone ... "; There are basically allusions behind every ancient text, which can enrich our knowledge of ancient culture. ..... and so on, 200, 300, so that students can expand their associations in the narrative; It can be used by students as the basis of argumentative writing, which is enough to meet the general composition needs.

A Chinese book based on words is a small encyclopedia in itself. Astronomical geography, ancient and modern Chinese and foreign, anecdotes of celebrities and trivial matters are all involved. As long as it is sorted and classified, a lot of content can be used as writing material, which can really be called "taking local materials".

From the above analysis, we can know that there are writing materials everywhere, which exist in your back and forth and serve you at any time, but it depends on your emancipation of mind, your discovery and your induction. Why is the water in the pond so clear? Because there is inexhaustible living water for it. )

Third, the structure

The structure of this paper is unclear. If the above two problems are corrected, the structure will naturally not be a problem. This is a slight.

Fourth, language.

The author's language is fluent, and some languages are still vivid and have a good foundation. There are few ill sentences and typos, some improper judgments, inaccurate words, and proper limit out of control, all of which are caused by vague concepts and unreasonable understanding. Reading more books will naturally solve the problem, and the problem is not big.

Good sentences (accurate and profound understanding of things):

1. This is an era of competition. Without competition, there will be no development. Competition creates self-renewal and social renewal (it is appropriate to change "progress") (Paragraph 1)

2. If you don't know how to live in harmony, you will only isolate yourself and become an outcast of society. (Paragraph 2)

3. Peaceful coexistence adds a new connotation of "cooperation". (Paragraph 3)

4. Everything is dialectical unity. In a peaceful environment, the active factor of "competition" can explode its power. (Paragraph 4)

Ill sentences (including improper words)-inaccurate, incomplete and not profound understanding of things (and typos)

1, thousands of years of feudal history has shaken this belief from the side. How can you be sure that it comes from the "side" and not from the "front" or "root"? Besides, what facts have "shaken" this "belief" in "... history? To what extent is it "shaking"? Such an argument is hard to convince. )

People began to doubt and think, and began to look for new directions. (It has been said above that "harmony" is a kind of "belief", and later it was changed to "direction", which is inconsistent and seems unclear. )

3. As a topic language, competition is widely popular in every corner. (1, "competition" as an idea has long been widely recognized and deeply rooted in people's hearts; As a method and social lifestyle, it has long been skillfully used by all countries and nationalities in the world; As a word, it is also familiar to hundreds of millions of people and frequently appears in people's word of mouth and various media publications. These three meanings, should we emphasize this one-"competition is like words"? Or do you want to say it all? 2. The expression "topic language" is not good and its meaning is not clear. 3. The Corner is self-created, which is not good. Not all words can overlap with "AABB". Simply put, "every corner". )

4. Social rejuvenation. ("Update" is improper. Use "innovation" or "progress". )

Incredibly, "harmony is precious", which has long been forgotten by everyone, reappears as a new term. (See the sick sentence 13. 1, the whole paper is not true-it is not "forgotten by everyone" or "fresh", so it is not appropriate. 2. "Harmony is precious" is a kind of "thought", "concept", "value standard" and "moral evaluation", so you can't say "show", you can use the word "put forward". )

6. What is right and wrong between "harmony" and "competition"? They don't have the question of "right or wrong". Do you want to say "where to go"? The question of which to choose. )

7. If you win the game, you are sure to beat your opponent and take the lead. How can you talk about peace? (Actually, we can get along-see "2". Above the content and below the sick sentence 8, but not necessarily "nothing"-will the "opponent" be willing to fail and will it trigger a new round of "competition"? )

8. "Harmony" and "competition" coexist ("coexistence" is not sufficient, so it can be said that they are "not contradictory and incompatible. A' harmonious' friend may not be without competition, but a' competitive' opponent can still live in harmony and friendly coexistence "-The Five Principles of Peaceful Coexistence put forward by Premier Zhou Enlai at the Bandung Conference is the best example. )

9. The same species help each other ... The competition for survival between different species (unclear: there is competition within the same species, and it may be more intense-"scholars despise each other", "Christians starve", "intellectual property protection law" and "copyright law" are the manifestations and products of fierce competition; "Different species" will also "help each other"-the phenomenon of "symbiosis" in biology means helping each other)

10, continuous (continuous) (commonly referred to as "continuous")

1 1, the project to be studied is becoming more and more complicated (1), generally speaking, "problems" and "topics" are studied, but "projects" are not studied. 2. "Trivial" is irreversible. You may want to say something like "We have a lot to do and great difficulties to face". In fact, the article is concise, you can say whatever you want, and you don't have to carve chapters to add more luster. For reference. )

12, too much wealth will be uncontrollable. This sentence has nothing to do with this topic, it is completely redundant! )

13, the concept of "harmony" asks the market again. (First of all, this concept has always existed in people's minds and has not been "recalled" after being forgotten; Secondly, "asking the market" is not appropriate. If you want to use it, you have to use words like "recall" and "put forward". )

14, assemble and disperse troops to form a clique. (this "group" is likely to be "big" and it is not appropriate to use "small"; "Power" is "concentration", isn't it "power"? )

There are few typos.

Five, writing and rolling

Because the marking teacher has to finish reading this article in a short time, the writing method and the number of papers have a great influence on the marking of the teacher. The author of this paper has a good writing skill, with neat volumes, less smearing and beautiful handwriting. I hope to continue my efforts by going up a flight of stairs.

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