Help translate your cover letter

Wang Yuan, the first part of your cover letter is very good, but I think the last paragraph needs improvement. If you are willing to modify it, I can help you translate it. October 7, 2006

Dear sir/madam,

Like other young people, I am also looking for a job, or looking for my career. starting point.

Like thousands of young people, I am looking for a job, or you may say I am searching for a starting point of my career.

After seeing your company’s recruitment information I was so excited when I saw your “help wanted “notice.

Because I paid close attention to many companies with development potential during college, including your company.

To be honest with you, I have been paying close attention to all those enterprises that have great potentials and your company is one of them.

My salesperson position in your company Yearning for a long time. The major I studied in college is marketing. In addition to learning this major well, I have been looking forward to this day when I can become a member of your sales department. I consider it a great honor to be part of the team.

I majored in marketing sales. Not only I have a solid foundation in my field, but also I extend my interest to other areas like literature, philosophy, the strategies of management, the communication skills and the social skills etc.. When I was at college, I was very active in various social activities. I also paid attention to the cultivation of my comprehensive abilities, literature, philosophy, law, management skills, communication skills, communicative skills, etc. While in school, I served as a class organization committee member, planning and organizing the creation of the school's marketing association. I started a marketing sales club at college.

I know that as a business administration student, communication and practice are indispensable.

Before I went to college, I had had one year of experiences selling cosmetics due to the s financial difficulties of my family.

Due to family financial reasons, I dropped out of school to work in sales and have more than a year of experience in cosmetics sales. During college, I went to work in some business companies during each of my vacation. I worked in Tianjin Sky Lion Biology development Co., Ltd from June 2005 to September 2005, as a direct sales agent. From June to September 2005, I was engaged in direct sales at Tianjin Tiens Biological Development Co., Ltd. From June to September 2006, I studied marketing planning at Wuhan Qunguang Shopping Plaza and participated in some summer promotion planning of the mall. From June 2006 to September 2006, I focused on sales strategies at Wuhan Quanguang Shopping Plaza. My performance during the internship won the approval of the company leaders and colleagues. My outstanding performance during the student practical training had earned me the respect of my colleges and gained the approval of administrators of the companies.

I am perseverant, dedicated, able to endure hardships, and courageous. At work, we can both work independently and work together.

I am a girl of great character and wonderful temperament who enjoy splendid reputation for integrity, honesty, and loyalty. I am a hard working person. I could be an independent worker and I could be a great teamwork player , too. I am also a good problem solver.

My philosophy in life is: "Everything depends on people."

My philosophy is this: it is not what you say but what you do that counts. Please, could you kindly give me a chance to work for this great company? I really appreciate if you could take my request into consideration.

Thank you.

Sincerely yours,

王元

I basically follow your original text. But I choose some words that are more commonly used by Westerners, such as :integrity, honesty, and loyalty. In addition, I will add "you are a master at solving problems" for you. This is also a more common word than "teaching" when fighting for a certain position or job, because it can solve problems. People are people with IQ. In the last few sentences, I changed it to a more practical request than a desire to teach. Speaking sincerely and sincerely is more likely to move people's hearts than speaking aggressively. I hope it can help you.

Blessings