I 1985 graduated from the Mechanical Department of Beijing University of Technology, and my report is revised.

This question examines the appropriate test sites, paying attention to the occasion and the speaker, and changing the honorific words to modest words; It is revised as follows: (1) "numerous students" is a metaphor for numerous students, so it is not appropriate to refer to "I" here, and it can be changed to "students"; (2) "visit" to visit-mostly used for shops to customers, where it means that you are not suitable, you can change it to "browse"; (3) "negotiation" refers to the conversation about commerce, commodity trading and buying and selling in commercial activities? It is not appropriate to use it here, and it can be changed to "contact"; (4) "Dingli" refers to the other party vigorously, which is inappropriate here and can be changed to "Dali";

Reference answer: (

1) Replace "numerous students" with "students";

(2) Change "visit" to "browse";

(3) Change "negotiation" to "contact";

(4) Change "determination" to "strength";