A composition of 900 words for the sixth grade of primary school: New Rhythm of the Ancient City

Composition title: The new rhyme of the ancient city

Key words: 900 words for the sixth grade of Gucheng Primary School

Number of words: 900 words composition

This article is suitable for: The sixth grade of primary school

Source of the composition:

This composition is a 900-word composition about the sixth grade of primary school. The title is: "New Rhythm of the Ancient City". Everyone is welcome to contribute. Although I am an authentic Xianju person, the reform created excellent conditions for my family, so I came to this beautiful city. Since I was in kindergarten, I have lived with a tutor in Linhai. Because it is a kindergarten class, there is not much homework. As soon as we get home, the teacher will take us to play in the nearby Ziyang Ancient Street or climb the Jiangnan Great Wall... Every day we go out early and come back late every day. We have a lot of fun. Gradually, it feels like here Just like my home, I have infinite attachment to it. Such a carefree life lasted only a few days. I slowly became a primary school teacher and the teacher was no longer laughing and joking; the homework was no longer the same; the tutor seemed to lock us in a cage. However, I am full of family-like feelings for this city. Every weekend, I worked hard to finish my homework, and finally got permission from my tutor to let me go out with a few classmates. This opportunity was like a treasure and I cherished it very much. When we came to the nearest Ziyang Street, I was very familiar with this road, so I took a few newcomers to play with me. Although it is an ancient street, it has undergone brand-new changes: the electric lights are new; the houses are almost all made of cement; even the public toilets are bright!

In 2005, the new campus was ready. I am a person who likes new things and dislikes old things, so I immediately went to sign up with my parents. As soon as I arrived at the school gate, I couldn't help but be stunned: the bright teaching buildings were eye-catching; tall and straight trees stood beside the teaching buildings; coupled with the huge crowds of applicants, this was going to be an exciting time. to the most beautiful scenery. I couldn't help but admire in my heart: Linhai has changed so much in recent years!

I live on campus and only go back once every two weeks. When I go out every afternoon, I always go to the nearby Luohe Park to play. Although the park is only about one hectare, the inside is comparable to a carnival. Moreover, it is newly built and there are many people playing there. How much has changed in my hometown from kindergarten to now!

What a hometown this will be!

Tomorrow, tomorrow!

What will it be tomorrow!

Comments from famous teachers: There are two place names in the article, one is Xianju and the other is Linhai. Judging from the content, the author should be describing Linhai. The author regards this place as his second hometown and introduces the scenery here, showing the beauty of the scenery near the sea. However, there are many clerical errors in the article. In addition, the young author must also pay attention to the smoothness of the sentences. "But the reform has created excellent conditions for my family." This sentence does not make sense. It is recommended to change it to "But my family has become rich after the reform and opening up." "I came to this beautiful city." Does "this city" in the sentence refer to the sea? "The tutor seems to want to lock us in a cage" was changed to "The tutor seems to want to lock us in a cage." The word "zao" in "The new campus is ready soon" is changed to "zao". In "Tall and straight trees stand beside the teaching building", the "KEKE" is changed to "KEKE". "This will be the most beautiful scenery ever" was changed to "This is really the most beautiful scenery". "But the inside is comparable to a carnival" was changed to "But the scenery inside is comparable to a carnival." "What a hometown this will be" is suggested to be changed to "What a beautiful hometown this will be". (Xuele China Distinguished Teacher: Teacher Wang Yunlian) 2009-11-24 16:24:00